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Angry Letter Draft

Dear City and County of Honolulu,

          Your city bus's provide a great source of transportation and make it easier for me to get from one place to another. I have been riding the city bus's almost every day since I was 11 years old. I have experienced riding many bus routes including; Route 2, Route 3, Route, 4, Route 7, Route 10, Route 13, Route 32, and Route B.

         

          However, Route 2 is the one particular bus route that I have always seemed to experience the most problems in. One of the problems that I have experienced is that the bus is always over packed. Route 2 goes through School Street and Middle Street, where it picks up many elderly, adults, teens, and young kids. Because of the limited seating, many people have to stand up in the middle isle, causing the bus to be very jam-packed and stuffed. Not only is an over-crowded bus uncomfortable, but it also makes it very chaotic for people to exit the bus at their stop. There are countless times where I see people try to squeeze themselves and their bags through others just to get pass the exit doors. Sometimes, when the buses are too packed, the drivers have to deny people from entering the bus, meaning that the people who were already waiting have to wait longer for the next bus. I have experienced these problems many times when I rode Route 2. 

         

          This is something that I believe needs to be fixed. Instead of having Route 2 arrive every 20 minutes, have Route 2 arrive every 10 minutes. This way, there would be less people entering the bus at these time intervals and the buses will not be too over-crowded. 

         

          Changing the bus schedule for Route 2 makes riding the bus a lot more safer for all its passengers. It makes entering/exiting the bus a lot more quicker and easier and its awaiting passengers will be guaranteed a ride on the bus. Please take this into consideration.

Sincerely,

Christine Cadiz